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Dizzy, swirly, can't stay straight.
The help I seek will come too late.
Thoughts are all muddled in head.
I can't even tell what I have said.
Heart is thumping, head is aching,
labored breathing, body shaking.
Pull it together, you'll be okay.
Just gotta take it day by day.
Slow your breath and lay real still.
Those thoughts will only make you ill.
It's tough to know where to begin.
Just start simple. Breathe out, breathe in.
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FanaticalPublishing Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2015

Lovely work, thank you for submitting it to the Weekly Review; I'm publishing it in today's issue.

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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is wonderful!:blackrose:
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TheMeTheyDontSee Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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NearlyInvisibleMind Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are very welcome:frail:
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013   Writer
Sounds somewhat like a panic attack. Very well described.
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TheMeTheyDontSee Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Pinebeatles101 Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013
This poem is well worded. Excellent work
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TheMeTheyDontSee Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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angeluchiha7 Featured By Owner Jun 27, 2013  Student Artist
wow that great peom :D
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TheMeTheyDontSee Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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angeluchiha7 Featured By Owner Jun 28, 2013  Student Artist
your welcome
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theShadowGrove Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
hi, I don't normally do this, but since you did just join #ShadowPoetry I'll make an exceptption and tell you that this would really work for our "dead-end world" contest (details here [link] )
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TheMeTheyDontSee Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I just tried to do that though and it won't let me because I already contributed it to Featured. How can I move it to the Dead-End World Contest?
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theShadowGrove Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
don't worry, I took care of it :)
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TheMeTheyDontSee Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you
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Imlookingformyself Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
i like it!
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TheMeTheyDontSee Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Dreamer113 Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Once again! Brilliant Job :cuddle:
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TheMeTheyDontSee Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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