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Tick tock, the time goes by.
I lay so still and wonder why.
Thoughts racing through my head.
Almost think I'd rather be dead,
Then go through these pointless motions.
Am I depressed or devoid of emotion?
With no happiness, I only feel pain.
Faking this smile is just a drain.
I don't know how much til I crack.
Almost wish for an anxiety attack.
What comes next? More of the same?
A suicide shouldn't be my aim.
When all seems lost, what do you do?
Getting some sleep would be something new.
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FanaticalPublishing Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2015

Lovely work, thank you for submitting it to the Weekly Review; I'm publishing it in today's issue.

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GwenneAreble Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't think you were actually asking, but when all seems lost I turn to Jesus :)
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RejectedSavior Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
But there are things out there that can actually help...
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GwenneAreble Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
There are things out there that will help for a little while. But I believe Jesus is the only one who can satisfy completely and is the only one to have a lasting affect. But Jesus didn't say we can't take medication or help from others to make things better, He just ultimately is the one that can help.
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RejectedSavior Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, sorry. I meant like real help that actually works.
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GwenneAreble Featured By Owner Aug 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
... So I'm guessing you believe He can't help. He certainly can't if you don't let Him. If you want to talk more about this, let's not get too many comment on this deviation. You can comment on my page if you want to.
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MagicalJoey Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013   Writer
Perfect description of insomnia.
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TheMeTheyDontSee Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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NuffleBunny Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is a really pretty poem.Very well written my friend,very well written.
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TheMeTheyDontSee Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Just write out whatever your feeling without any kind of rhyme or reason to it. I find it easier to rhyme because it distracts me from what I'm thinking and I can get it out easier, but a lot of people seem to write best free-form since they don't need to focus on rhyming or anything.
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NuffleBunny Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah but then I feel like if it doesn't rhyme it's just some big old list of my problems or something.
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TheMeTheyDontSee Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
There's nothing wrong with that. Anything that makes you feel better is worth doing. I used to be pretty bad with my poems. It wasn't necessarily that I wrote bad poetry (I'm unable to judge my own), but I hated them and was upset at myself for writing so badly. But I still wrote because getting out those emotions was worth it. Since recently, I had only written one poem in the last 6 years. I guess my self-esteem has raised because now I'm able to write without any verbal abuse and even post them on deviantART. So now they're really helpful for me. I don't know if they would do the same for you, but all that matters is doing whatever you want regardless of what others (or another side of yourself) think.
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NuffleBunny Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's really good advice.Well I'll see what I do about my poems maybe if I practice or something they'll get better. = 3 = (hopefully)
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TheMeTheyDontSee Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well I hope you feel confident enough sometime to show me some. I look forward to that day.
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NuffleBunny Featured By Owner Jun 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah me too = u =
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TheMeTheyDontSee Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You really think so? This is my first time really showing my poems.
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NuffleBunny Featured By Owner Jun 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hells yeah.It's definitely better than what I write...Well would be better if I wrote.But its really good. = 3 =
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TheMeTheyDontSee Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You don't know how you write until you try.
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NuffleBunny Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well I've tried but it always seems too forced. - n -
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